before he leaves for work,
he kisses her
and smiles tenderly
while she sleeps.
she awakes with a smile,
feeling loved and grateful
for the little things
Every kiss hello,
every kiss goodbye,
and perhaps the most special,
is the loving look
in his eyes.
She found a reason
that she never knew she needed
to go on.
A reason for every breath,
every second, every minute,
every hour of the day.
A reason that makes it
easier to breathe,
a reason that makes her
feel more alive…
their undying love.
© Lillian F — 4/12/13
*I feel like this is so…unoriginal and blah. I’m trying, I swear. I can’t believe I used to write poems every day when I was a teenager. What happened?!*
I dont know how to judge poetry, so if this is an example of unoriginal, so be it. Hey, I used to kiss my wife’s forehead every morning before I left the house until eventually she asked me to stop because it disrupted her sleep. Write an original poem about that! It was somewhere around year 14 of our pretty darn good left toegther.
Your comments on my poems are always most interesting. Lol, your wife asked you to stop. Hmm…well I guess I have a few more years left til I get sick of him waking me up. 🙂
I laughed at that^. (I’m pointing at thatfunnyblogguy’s comment, in case you can’t tell.) I can already imagine the POV of the poem’s speaker.
In any case, being unoriginal is totally okay. I mean humans can only say so much and feel so much before it all gets recycled and used over and over again. You’re good. 🙂
Well, he is a funny guy. 😉 Yeah, it’s hard to be original with love. Love has existed way too long ya know, lol.
I think it’s romantic and sweet. Love poetry is a minefield; it’s hard to say something original, and even harder to really express the depth of emotion without coming across as sappy and syrupy. That being said, there’s so much “dark” poetry abounding online, especially on the subject of the big L, that something on the positive side is quite welcome.
Thank you! You’re right, it’s hard to sound original on a subject that’s so…old, lol. I think that’s why I tend to write sad stuff, it’s a little easier. 😉
It’s lovely, Lily. Our poetry changes as we get older (and wiser) and what is ‘original’ anyway? 😉
Ya, what’s original anyway…never heard of that word before. 😀 Thanks Dianne.
This is beautiful Lily.. It’s those little things that show love and you expressed them so well here.. Viva la poetry!!!
Aw, thanks! Glad this wasn’t as bad as I thought. I guess I just tend to write sad stuff more often that lovey dovey, lol. 😉